AE Sample: Feedback Requested
 

I'm working on a sequence here, the style board was approved. Some Elements were tweaked to use owned assets, and now I feel some of the original impact has been lost. The music is forthcoming, so final animation timing is as well.

We like the outdoorsy feel, and the general rustic brown orange color theme.

I may have been looking at this to long, so any feedback would be appreciated. It is lacking a nice punch, but I'm becoming blind to it now!

http://dl.dropbox.co...0styleboard.psd
http://dl.dropbox.co...edback%20ll.mp4

The links don't work.

Oppps... Working links might help, eh?

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/2900108/feedback%20ll.mp4
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/2900108/pass...styleboard.psd

Hi Lloyd. My thoughts for what they're worth. I feel the style and the viewers focus are a bit fuzzy, which is why it lacks some punch. You set up a slam-down dynamic as the hills appear, the truck and tractor coming on are fine then I would suggest another slam-down/fast pullback for the goat (not the slow slide on) which would allow time for the fan to register when it appears, I would be tempted to let it open - as in your styleboard - and then scale it up just before/as the tilt happens. Isn't it amazing how other people could have always done it better than you did:-) Even if this is all rubbish I know that sometimes people giving me terrible opinions can occasionally cement in my own mind what is actually wrong, hope it's so in your case.

EDIT: Ooops, think I totally misread your question sorry - but can't for the life of me work out how to delete a post and the FAQ isn't much help. In the hope that I might get it right this time re the look of the image: Perhaps what's missing in the animation is the outline of the tractor which is a lot more interesting without anything being directly behind it, the fan is looking a bit washed out and there seems to be some blur on the back mountain which doesn't seem to be in keeping with the rest - I'll shutup now:-)