The Missionary Position

Kevin Carpenter · August 24th, 2007, 01:10 PM

The Missionary Position

Mormon Missionaries and Jehovah's Witnesses cross paths while spreading the word of God.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0MBubw8BMK8

Written and Produced by Matt Joyce
Directed and Edited by Kevin Carpenter

I would enjoy hearing any review or critique of my film! If you have a spare moment I would also love it if you hooked me up on YouTube (comment, rate, subscribe, etc).

Thanks in advance!

Bert Smyth · August 24th, 2007, 01:48 PM

I liked it, but felt that the ending needed something more, a twist or some ironic outcome more than what the ending was (I don't want to give it away).

The editing, camera angles, audio, and even the acting were all pretty good, very "solid". I think you need to now focus on lighting, as a lot of the actors were back lit, faces with too much shadow. I think if you upped the lighting, you'd have a really great production going. Other than that, everything else was really well done.

Kevin Carpenter · August 24th, 2007, 02:18 PM

Hehe, I'm starting my lighting class next week!

Yeah I've heard from a couple people that the ending could have used some kind of twist, but the way it ended was as intended.

Thanks for the compliments!

Tunde Anjorin · September 3rd, 2007, 09:32 PM

Dude that video rocked man!!!!!!! The lighting was not to shabby man don't beat yourself with a stick... Once again great work!!!!!

Brian Duke · September 3rd, 2007, 09:47 PM

Very interesting. Started out good. Could probably be a little tighter overall. Didn't need THAT many door openings. We get the point after 1-2 doors. COuld probably be about 2-3 minutes. If you are going to make a comedy, you may wanna stay away from real bloody messy scenes. Just caught me off guard and didn't seem to match the real good potential opening. Just my opinion, but I agree with some of the others, you probably could have more of a twist at the end, in lieu of the blood fights and semi rape scene.

Don't worry about the lighting. I didn't see an issue. Work more on the story telling aspect.

Keep it up.

Kevin Carpenter · September 5th, 2007, 02:03 PM

Thanks for the review Brian! I really appreciate the input. The bloody, violent, semi-rape scenes are the ones that make me laugh the hardest. I guess my idea of comedy is a little different then yours. :D

Tunde - Glad you liked it!!

Brian Duke · September 5th, 2007, 02:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kevin Carpenter

Thanks for the review Brian! I really appreciate the input. The bloody, violent, semi-rape scenes are the ones that make me laugh the hardest. I guess my idea of comedy is a little different then yours. :D

Tunde - Glad you liked it!!

I'm sure most people have a different idea of comedy, however, there is a difference of what a "comedy" is and what makes you laugh. I laugh at Fargo, Goodfellas, Requiem for a Dream, but they are not comedies. I may be wrong, but I think most people will have a hard time swallowing brutal gruesome violence images as comedic. Second, I just though it may have been a cheap way to end a potential really funny short. You can have fights, but to make them violent and bloody, hmm, well, that's just my opinion.

Good luck.

Kevin Carpenter · September 5th, 2007, 02:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Brian Duke

I'm sure most people have a different idea of comedy, however, there is a difference of what a "comedy" is and what makes you laugh. I laugh at Fargo, Goodfellas, Requiem for a Dream, but they are not comedies. I may be wrong, but I think most people will have a hard time swallowing brutal gruesome violence images as comedic. Second, I just though it may have been a cheap way to end a potential really funny short. You can have fights, but to make them violent and bloody, hmm, well, that's just my opinion.

Good luck.

Ahh you're totally right. Not a comedy, I understand what you mean. I also agree that most people won't find the violence funny, that's ok with me though. The concept had the potential to go in a different direction at the end and be something else (the writer and i even discussed it), but I liked it the way it was. A funny, offensive, gruesome, microcosm of world religion. We knew we would lose some people who were expecting a gimmicky twist at the end but it felt good to not do it.

August 24th, 2007, 01:10 PM	#1
Kevin Carpenter New Boot Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: San Diego, CA Posts: 15	The Missionary Position - Comedy, Short Film The Missionary Position Mormon Missionaries and Jehovah's Witnesses cross paths while spreading the word of God. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0MBubw8BMK8 Written and Produced by Matt Joyce Directed and Edited by Kevin Carpenter I would enjoy hearing any review or critique of my film! If you have a spare moment I would also love it if you hooked me up on YouTube (comment, rate, subscribe, etc). Thanks in advance! __________________ - KC http://www.exfilms.com

August 24th, 2007, 02:18 PM	#3
Kevin Carpenter New Boot Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: San Diego, CA Posts: 15	Hehe, I'm starting my lighting class next week! Yeah I've heard from a couple people that the ending could have used some kind of twist, but the way it ended was as intended. Thanks for the compliments! __________________ - KC http://www.exfilms.com

September 3rd, 2007, 09:47 PM	#5
Brian Duke Major Player Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hollywood, California Posts: 899	Very interesting. Started out good. Could probably be a little tighter overall. Didn't need THAT many door openings. We get the point after 1-2 doors. COuld probably be about 2-3 minutes. If you are going to make a comedy, you may wanna stay away from real bloody messy scenes. Just caught me off guard and didn't seem to match the real good potential opening. Just my opinion, but I agree with some of the others, you probably could have more of a twist at the end, in lieu of the blood fights and semi rape scene. Don't worry about the lighting. I didn't see an issue. Work more on the story telling aspect. Keep it up. __________________ Visit me and my work at www.artofduke.com

September 5th, 2007, 02:03 PM	#6
Kevin Carpenter New Boot Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: San Diego, CA Posts: 15	Thanks for the review Brian! I really appreciate the input. The bloody, violent, semi-rape scenes are the ones that make me laugh the hardest. I guess my idea of comedy is a little different then yours. :D Tunde - Glad you liked it!! __________________ - KC http://www.exfilms.com

August 24th, 2007, 01:48 PM	#2
Bert Smyth Regular Crew Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Portland, Oregon Posts: 178	I liked it, but felt that the ending needed something more, a twist or some ironic outcome more than what the ending was (I don't want to give it away). The editing, camera angles, audio, and even the acting were all pretty good, very "solid". I think you need to now focus on lighting, as a lot of the actors were back lit, faces with too much shadow. I think if you upped the lighting, you'd have a really great production going. Other than that, everything else was really well done.

September 3rd, 2007, 09:32 PM	#4
Tunde Anjorin Regular Crew Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: atlanta ga Posts: 52	Dude that video rocked man!!!!!!! The lighting was not to shabby man don't beat yourself with a stick... Once again great work!!!!!