new commercial i shoot very funy a must see!!
 

YouTube - Tiffany from my NY trip

let me know what you think

enjoy

Hi Ram,

Nice idea and well shot. I just found it slow. Would make a great 30 spot. Like the shot "she sent me the card" is completely unnecessary.

The opening shots cuts away just as the two extras enter the frame, which bothered me. You should slip the shot so that they establish themselves better.

Well done, though.

funny. I agree on the cut on the first shot. could also be tightened where the co-worker slides over. Did you intend for the first two shots to be un-level? I found that disconcerting.

thanks for the replays
since i just shot it for pro company and had nothing to do with the editing i have nothing to do about it

but i can't agree more with you
the two shot is just not a good take that they decided to take (don't know way):(

I didn't realize you only shot it. In that case, great job!

Yes, I agree. Needed tighter editing, but shooting was outstanding!

thank you all
:)

that was funny. Good stuff man

Great stuff
 

Hamud nora.