WARNING: May Contain Nudity!
 

Yes, this video may contain some slight female nudity. Please don't hold that against it.

It is a 2-3 minute long B&W short film called Fade that I made a few weeks ago. It is a bit of an experiment visually, so I'm looking for feedback on my photography more than anything else if possible.

It's the story of a woman who died and is haunting her old house until one day her husband brings a new lover home to replace her.

It isn't a final edit, but is very close. I still have some minor changes to make (like the contrast). The music is a temporary piece until I find someone to score it for me. It will likely end up with a classical piece instead of the heavy industrial music that is on it now.

http://www.pyroglyphfilms.com/gallery/video/FadeNIN.mov
Give it a minute to come up or so, once you click it. Quicktime format.

Thanks for watching.

Excellent Dylan! I don't remember what I said about your last project but this was festival worthy. (Maybe even sponge worthy).

I didn't think the music was quite 'on' for the visual mood but, of course, the words of the song fit well.

Loved the fact that you used black and white. The house and the sky were overexposed. You might consider b&w filters (red) to darken the sky.

Enjoyed it. Keep up the good work!

PS: Didn't see any nudity. What a ripoff. That was the only reason I watched! :)

Thanks Rob!
Good point about the filters, I didn't even think about it, since this was my first B&W project. Next time!

The nudity is very brief, wait for the ghost to walk down the stairs and you might get a quick flash.

"The nudity is very brief, wait for the ghost to walk down the stairs and you might get a quick flash."

That's really reaching, Dylan... I'll never know when to believe you again ;)

I thought the b/w gave it a nice texture, especially with the ghosting effect.

Damn, bandwidth limit exceeded!

dylan certainly knows how to generate interest in his projects, hehehehe.

<<<-- Originally posted by Joe Carney : dylan certainly knows how to generate interest in his projects, hehehehe. -->>>

My milkshake brings all the boys to the yard... :)

My video apparently got lots of hits and put me over my 2gb limit. Thanks to quick action by my pimp webmaster, it's back up and running now though.

Hi Dylan,

Good to see the video is back online so that I could watch it. It looks good, B&W suits the movie very well. Good location and photography.
And it doesn't need nudity ;-)

You could consider making this more dark or moody, the shots could have that. Make it more ghost-like by using different sound and other music. To give it a combination feeling of after-life and remembering good moments. Storywise the ending could have been brought further.

....Just my 2 cents....

Best,
Peter

Nudity - seeing that this forum is 85% guys, it doesn't surprise me! ;)
 

Hi Dylan...

I really, really liked your film! The B & W definitely added to it. The overexposed house and sky kind of add to the feel of the film... giving it a lonely, washed out, faded feeling. However, other filters you can use that are less dramatic as red, are yellow and orange.

You said you needed to make minor changes in the contrast. I guess I can see some shots looking washed out here and there... but again, I think it adds alot to the mood of the film and hope you don't adjust too much. The lighting, to me, gives me the feeling of emptiness and loneliness which is probably how the ghost feels.

The music... I like it. But classical... what composer do you have in mind?

Also... what camera did you use and what did you use to edit it?

Oh.... by the way.... yes, I saw the "shot"!

Hey!
Thanks for the feedback (especially the praise!).

About the nudity, I was going to put in my first post that it was actually completely unintentional when I shot it, but I figured no one would believe me (although it IS true!) so I didn't bother. :)

The changes in contrast I have to make are minor. The overall look won't change.

It was shot on a Canon XL1 using the 3x lens and edited on Vegas 4.

I'm currently recutting it to Beethoven's Moonlight Sonata, which is the music I had in mind for it when I first came up with the concept. Hopefully I'll have a preview of the final version by this weekend.

Peter, I know what you mean about the ending. In retrospect, I wish I had worked on it more, or done a bit more with it. Oh well. Live and learn. I shot it 2000 miles from here, so I can't quite go back and do a few extra shots. :)

Good job. I especially liked the editing, and just to be contrary, I thought the music you used really worked pretty well.
looked and looked and looked again, also saw no nudity.
The quality of the piece made up for the lack of skin, though.
I would be very intersted in seing more of your work.
Michael

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Dylan,
I say leave it the way it is minus the score.....
It rocked IMO.

The dissolves worked perfect for what you did, and I think it really added to the "ghost" realism in a short piece like yours.

Keep pumping them out.

I'm working on the commercial from hell at the moment......ugg <;~)

Thanks guys!


UPDATE!!!!

Here is the newer version, set to different music, as well as a few changes in the footage.

I'd like feedback specificaly on the new music,
thanks!

http://www.pyroglyphfilms.com/galler...fadesonata.mov

Also, this version is a little more compressed than my last, so hopefully it doesn't use up all my bandwidth in 3 days.

Hi Dylan, here is my take...

For me, Moonlight Sonata sounds better if accompanied by strings and other instruments. Personally, I think another version of it would be better suited for your film.

However, the changes in the footage seemed to be in sync with the music. I also liked the "whooshing" sound you added when the ghost sees her husband with his new lover.

All in all... I liked it. I do have to say that I liked your old font for the titles, etc. better!

Another example of why you should always go with your first thoughts. And why you can't edit by committee. And why movies get ruined by comment cards.

The music is tired. Making the cuts on the beat is predictable. I can't think of the term but the "whoosh" takes away from the scene. The end is, now, too long.