I'm getting better, any critiques would be useful. at DVinfo.net

Steven Hoffman · April 26th, 2010, 01:33 PM

I posted up my first TV Commercial about 2-3 years ago. It was horrible, but at the time, I was proud of it because I had made it. No training. No help. It was really bad, but it worked amazingly for the business.

I've made over 300 commercials since then.

I'd love some critical comments on two of my most recent commercials.

Original Ad for those who are curious(Green screen, Horrible, somehow became famous locally):
YouTube - I BUY IT!

Football themed ad(still shots):
http://www.ssjvideo.com/chickenbowl.wmv

Charity event ad(green screen):
http://www.ssjvideo.com/chocolate.wmv

Roshdi Alkadri · April 27th, 2010, 02:39 AM

you asked for critique...so here it goes

The concept is good, the audio mix is also nice.

The green spill around the characters looks bad. The drop shadow on the text is too much.
The graphic of the chicken coming in from screen left is too stretched and the green around its edges is too obvious.

Richard Gooderick · April 27th, 2010, 03:57 AM

I think they are punchy and fun.
I missed the name of the non-profit organisation. The sound was not good at that point.

April 26th, 2010, 01:33 PM	#1
Steven Hoffman Regular Crew Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Buffalo, New York Posts: 51	I'm getting better, any critiques would be useful. I posted up my first TV Commercial about 2-3 years ago. It was horrible, but at the time, I was proud of it because I had made it. No training. No help. It was really bad, but it worked amazingly for the business. I've made over 300 commercials since then. I'd love some critical comments on two of my most recent commercials. Original Ad for those who are curious(Green screen, Horrible, somehow became famous locally): YouTube - I BUY IT! Football themed ad(still shots): http://www.ssjvideo.com/chickenbowl.wmv Charity event ad(green screen): http://www.ssjvideo.com/chocolate.wmv

April 27th, 2010, 03:57 AM	#3
Richard Gooderick Major Player Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: London, UK Posts: 795	I think they are punchy and fun. I missed the name of the non-profit organisation. The sound was not good at that point. __________________ http://www.gooderick.com

April 27th, 2010, 02:39 AM	#2
Roshdi Alkadri Major Player Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Calgary, Alberta Posts: 265	you asked for critique...so here it goes The concept is good, the audio mix is also nice. The green spill around the characters looks bad. The drop shadow on the text is too much. The graphic of the chicken coming in from screen left is too stretched and the green around its edges is too obvious.