Short shot with 7d! Please critique! at DVinfo.net

Rafael Arguello · October 12th, 2010, 06:21 PM

YouTube - Amor Ciego (Blind Love) (San Francisco State University (SFSU) 2010)

Ali Jafri · October 18th, 2010, 12:11 AM

don't mean to discourage, but acting and script was rather poor. Perhaps you could think of a more engaging plot for your next short.

Rafael Arguello · October 18th, 2010, 11:45 PM

Thanks for your criticism.

I'll definitely take that into account next time.

Just want to mention that I did this in three days and my cast were amateur actors. It was for a school competition.

Sverrir Fridriksson · October 23rd, 2010, 12:55 PM

I agree with Ali Jafri but I felt the technical aspects were quite good.

Rafael Arguello · October 25th, 2010, 09:58 PM

Thanks a lot guys.

I will definitely take this into account for my next short.

Lloyd Ubshura · October 28th, 2010, 11:34 PM

I agree with everyone above. The acting could use improvement, but for beginners, it was very good...

The shots were nice. Good camera work. Good coloring. Somewhat interesting plot, but a lot of holes in it. But I liked the color and lighting.

Keep going! There's a lot of talent in there.

Chuck Spaulding · November 1st, 2010, 02:28 PM

When your starting out getting good actors can be really difficult, not that those actors where bad. It was all just a bit stiff.

You could still re-edit this and tighten it up a lot which would help move it a long better.

I think you did a lot of things right, I don't know how many shorts you have produced but keep doing them and you'll get better.

Its been my experience that young actors really pick up on how a set is managed, if you keep it light and fun that generally comes across. So I'm guessing that you guys were concerned more with the camera and lighting than making sure the actors where engaged and having fun. Just a guess on my part.

Keep up the good work.

Scott Brickert · November 5th, 2010, 09:37 PM

I agree, do another. Hopefully next time you won't have to begin with 20s of black screen... :)

Erin Wiedner · November 10th, 2010, 02:53 AM

Rafael, I think you did a great job. I actually thoroughly enjoyed the film.

Your shot selection was diverse, yet was still aesthetically pleasing, not bordering on experimental. The shots all had a feeling of movement and worked well as a whole, the editing also worked well to further push the movement of the shots.

In regard to the acting, I think you and your actors did very well in bringing the characters to life. I was drawn into the film and felt that I was right there with the characters as they were having their experiences. I was very happy to see that you dealt with the dramatic moments in such a subdued manner, as most times we see overacting rather than small amounts of underacting.

In regard to the plot, I can honestly say, I was not expecting any of the twists or turns. It was definitely not predictable. It was great how you managed to hide the true intention of the wife until the last second.

All in all, I think you did a great job and would be interested in seeing more of your work.

I liked this so much, I am going to post about on twitter.

Ali Jafri · November 11th, 2010, 03:33 AM

Erin, Rafael's film was still better than your comments about it!

October 12th, 2010, 06:21 PM	#1
Rafael Arguello New Boot Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: San Francisco, CA Posts: 9	Short shot with 7d! Please critique! YouTube - Amor Ciego (Blind Love) (San Francisco State University (SFSU) 2010)

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Ali Jafri Major Player Join Date: May 2008 Location: Karachi, Pakistan Posts: 210	don't mean to discourage, but acting and script was rather poor. Perhaps you could think of a more engaging plot for your next short. __________________ Windows 7 Ultimate 64-bit // i7 2600K // 16GB RAM // ASUS P8P67 Board // NVIDIA GTX 470 Sony Vegas Pro 13 // Adobe Premiere Pro CC 2014 // http://vimeo.com/alijafri

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Scott Brickert Major Player Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Crested Butte, CO Posts: 576	I agree, do another. Hopefully next time you won't have to begin with 20s of black screen... :) __________________ Scott Shot-By-Scott

November 11th, 2010, 03:33 AM	#10
Ali Jafri Major Player Join Date: May 2008 Location: Karachi, Pakistan Posts: 210	??? Erin, Rafael's film was still better than your comments about it! __________________ Windows 7 Ultimate 64-bit // i7 2600K // 16GB RAM // ASUS P8P67 Board // NVIDIA GTX 470 Sony Vegas Pro 13 // Adobe Premiere Pro CC 2014 // http://vimeo.com/alijafri

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October 18th, 2010, 11:45 PM	#3
Rafael Arguello New Boot Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: San Francisco, CA Posts: 9	Thanks for your criticism. I'll definitely take that into account next time. Just want to mention that I did this in three days and my cast were amateur actors. It was for a school competition.

October 23rd, 2010, 12:55 PM	#4
Sverrir Fridriksson Regular Crew Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Iceland Posts: 58	I agree with Ali Jafri but I felt the technical aspects were quite good.

October 25th, 2010, 09:58 PM	#5
Rafael Arguello New Boot Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: San Francisco, CA Posts: 9	Thanks a lot guys. I will definitely take this into account for my next short.

October 28th, 2010, 11:34 PM	#6
Lloyd Ubshura Major Player Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Las Vegas, NV Posts: 204	I agree with everyone above. The acting could use improvement, but for beginners, it was very good... The shots were nice. Good camera work. Good coloring. Somewhat interesting plot, but a lot of holes in it. But I liked the color and lighting. Keep going! There's a lot of talent in there.

November 1st, 2010, 02:28 PM	#7
Chuck Spaulding Trustee Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Thousand Oaks Posts: 1,099	When your starting out getting good actors can be really difficult, not that those actors where bad. It was all just a bit stiff. You could still re-edit this and tighten it up a lot which would help move it a long better. I think you did a lot of things right, I don't know how many shorts you have produced but keep doing them and you'll get better. Its been my experience that young actors really pick up on how a set is managed, if you keep it light and fun that generally comes across. So I'm guessing that you guys were concerned more with the camera and lighting than making sure the actors where engaged and having fun. Just a guess on my part. Keep up the good work.

November 10th, 2010, 02:53 AM	#9
Erin Wiedner New Boot Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: San Diego, California Posts: 16	Rafael, I think you did a great job. I actually thoroughly enjoyed the film. Your shot selection was diverse, yet was still aesthetically pleasing, not bordering on experimental. The shots all had a feeling of movement and worked well as a whole, the editing also worked well to further push the movement of the shots. In regard to the acting, I think you and your actors did very well in bringing the characters to life. I was drawn into the film and felt that I was right there with the characters as they were having their experiences. I was very happy to see that you dealt with the dramatic moments in such a subdued manner, as most times we see overacting rather than small amounts of underacting. In regard to the plot, I can honestly say, I was not expecting any of the twists or turns. It was definitely not predictable. It was great how you managed to hide the true intention of the wife until the last second. All in all, I think you did a great job and would be interested in seeing more of your work. I liked this so much, I am going to post about on twitter.