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Arthur Abramov November 11th, 2012 04:15 AM

Wide and Slide Winter MiddleEast Cinestyle canon 5d mark iii
 
Wide and Slide Winter MiddleEast Cinestyle canon 5d mark iii


Alan Melville November 16th, 2012 04:26 AM

Re: Wide and Slide Winter MiddleEast Cinestyle canon 5d mark iii
 
Hi Arthur, my humble opinion;

1. Your opening score isn't aligned to the opening frame, I feel it would have a better effect if it were.

2. The first scene at 0:23 where you lose the reflection could have faded into the second scene, this would occur between 0:19 and 0:22, by 0:23 you would be completly into the 2nd scene. I don't think it should come to a standstill as it does at 0:25,

3.Between the 2nd and 3rd scenes the viewer is left looking at 'dead' space, i.e. nothing is happening movement wise, I feel on this sort of film one needs to keep the movement up due to the 'still' nature of the scenes. This 'dead' space occurs between 0:23 and 0:27, thats 4 full seconds! When the slide starts on the 3rd scene it just takes off, figiturly speaking.

When you're shifting from one scene to another have a plan in advance so that you can tie the scenes into each other with more flow, i.e. if you're panning across a scene and the next scene is to slide along the scene, try and set the previous shot up as a pan that transforms to a slide and then you can fade to the next scene.

The scenes are a bit mismatched after the end of the second scene. You've ended the second scene with some bar work, maybe consider starting scene three with some bar work. It'll make it flow better. There are two scenes with bollards, maybe group them together.

Be careful shooting into the sun as you have, it washes out your colours, either change your shoot time to later / earlier in the day or try and set the shot up between 4 o'clock and 8 o'clock positions using the sun as 12 o'clock. The flare caused by shooting into the sun in your scenes is more of an anoyance than an effect due to it's small size and lack of solid edges.

Using an alternative arrangement (order) to stitch your scenes together, I think, will improve your little vid.

BTW, watch out for your shadow.... ;)

There's a heap of things you can do in post for coulour etc but at present, concetrate on capturing good footage.

Well done for making an effort.

Al


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