My first commercial(criticism please)

Garrison Hayes · November 26th, 2006, 03:05 PM

Okay....

Not bad! However there are some things you need to change. for 1 the Voice Over guy's voice was pretty low (as stated earlier). The Video quality is pretty good...the Sales guy could have said his lines a little quicker (An...A...r...m and a....Le....g.... / lol). Now for me...unless i'm really fond of the something i dont give free advert.....to anyone. If i were you i'd reshoot the outside of the jewelry store at a different angle, so that you can get rid of the Subway and Nextel signs in the top right corner.

But thats Just me.

I could tell instantly the store was a little smaller but i think you did really well with making the small space work.

It looks like a commercial...nice a cheesy. (But it's supposed to be that way)

Hope that was Helpfull
G. Hayes

November 26th, 2006, 03:05 PM	#16
Garrison Hayes Regular Crew Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Atlanta, Ga USA Posts: 110	Rob the Jewelry Store and tell them to make me a Grill. Okay.... Not bad! However there are some things you need to change. for 1 the Voice Over guy's voice was pretty low (as stated earlier). The Video quality is pretty good...the Sales guy could have said his lines a little quicker (An...A...r...m and a....Le....g.... / lol). Now for me...unless i'm really fond of the something i dont give free advert.....to anyone. If i were you i'd reshoot the outside of the jewelry store at a different angle, so that you can get rid of the Subway and Nextel signs in the top right corner. But thats Just me. I could tell instantly the store was a little smaller but i think you did really well with making the small space work. It looks like a commercial...nice a cheesy. (But it's supposed to be that way) Hope that was Helpfull G. Hayes __________________ I'm in love... With my Panasonic AG-DVX100B. Triple M.