Show Your Work 2008

Doug Okamoto · April 19th, 2008, 07:17 PM

Douglas!

Great first name by the way! :)

Lorinda is always so nice she can't criticize, me on the other hand...

Not a criticism but a little critic. The video was very informative and entertaining! It actually kept my interest. The ending VFX were good could have been better if this were a big budget film production! The end left me a little hanging, maybe a "thank you for watching" or ending graphic would be a good way to finish your story. But other than that I liked it very much! Great job.

Lorinda Norton · April 19th, 2008, 08:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doug Okamoto

Lorinda is always so nice she can't criticize...

Wait ‘til you get to know me better, Doug. ;) (Say, did we have fun at NAB or what??? I’m so glad you were there.)

Douglas, thank you for directing me to your gallery. I’ve watched and been thoroughly fascinated by three of the videos so far, and I plan to spend a lot of time on your site until I’ve seen them all. Consider me a fan!

Douglas R. Bruce · April 19th, 2008, 08:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doug Okamoto

Douglas!

Great first name by the way! :)

Lorinda is always so nice she can't criticize, me on the other hand...

Not a criticism but a little critic. The video was very informative and entertaining! It actually kept my interest. The ending VFX were good could have been better if this were a big budget film production! The end left me a little hanging, maybe a "thank you for watching" or ending graphic would be a good way to finish your story. But other than that I liked it very much! Great job.

Doug ( not a bad first name.... )
Thanks for your comments.
Yes! I was in 2 minds about the ending.
Maybe my Monty Python youth surfaced!
However I have actually made a 2nd version without the explosions.
I am just waiting to see what the reaction is going to be over the next week or so before deciding which version I will leave on the site.
Regards,
Douglas

Kevin Defy · April 20th, 2008, 12:38 AM

tell me what you think!

http://vimeo.com/906982

Rikki Bruce · April 20th, 2008, 04:45 AM

That was fantastic work. Would you mind saying which camera and equip you used in production?

Oleg Kalyan · April 20th, 2008, 02:03 PM

Rikki, thank you!
I've shot the commercial with Canon H1 with my CF profile, PS technik mini35 adapter, the lenses were Nikkor 35mm 1.4 50mm 1.2 Zeiss 100mm F2 macro and Elite 75mm 1.9
Cheers!

Dennis Murphy · April 20th, 2008, 04:22 PM

I thought the video was ok, but the music was annoying. That trumpet sound was like a whining insect, and the dynamics of the loop are noticeably different... the volume of the first beat is significantly louder in a distracting way.
Disclaimer: just my opinion of course.

Dennis Murphy · April 20th, 2008, 04:31 PM

That was cool.
Nice performances and you caught them nicely in a way that reflects a night out getting hammered watching some 'unknowns' perform in a dark corner of a dodgy bar.
My kind of night out.

Mike Eshaq · April 20th, 2008, 05:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dennis Murphy

I thought the video was ok, but the music was annoying. That trumpet sound was like a whining insect, and the dynamics of the loop are noticeably different... the volume of the first beat is significantly louder in a distracting way.
Disclaimer: just my opinion of course.

Right on,I can see how music tastes can differ from person to person. I dont make music, I make videos. Was hoping to get feedback on the video? lol

Thanks

Matthew Overstreet · April 20th, 2008, 05:29 PM

New reel is now online.

http://vimeo.com/883277

Allen Plowman · April 20th, 2008, 05:41 PM

It appeared you are trying to tell a story through the music, I also found the audio loop difficult to listen to, it made the entire clip hard to follow. In my amateur opinion, the visual half of your video exceeded the quality of your audio half.
The audio is an integral part of a music video.
I listen to rap music, it is not the style I dislike, it is the poor mix and repetitious background loop

Mike Eshaq · April 20th, 2008, 08:20 PM

Hmmm...I rendered the audio at the best quality I can. Youtube really gets to me that way, there is no way to make it perfect.

Thanks

Mark Dawson · April 21st, 2008, 01:02 AM

My new short features shot on location 19th April in St Johns Wood London - Features a talented London drama student acting to the music of Snow Patrol's - Chasing Cars

it can be found on my website www.londonmarkfilms.co.uk under the films section.

Tom Hardwick · April 21st, 2008, 01:15 AM

Nice one Mark, and it's all in the lighting, the lighting, the lighting. So many people forget that.

It's just a shame the songwriter doesn't know that the past tense of lie is lay.

tom.

Douglas R. Bruce · April 21st, 2008, 08:13 AM

In response to some of the feedback I have received in the past 2 days I have tweaked and adjusted certain parts of the video and have now uploaded a newer version.

Same url as mentioned in the first post in this thread.

Regards,
Douglas

April 20th, 2008, 12:38 AM	#469
Kevin Defy New Boot Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Seattle, WA Posts: 24	New Music Video!!! tell me what you think! http://vimeo.com/906982 Last edited by Kevin Defy; April 20th, 2008 at 12:39 AM. Reason: bad link

April 20th, 2008, 05:41 PM	#476
Allen Plowman Major Player Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Paradise, california Posts: 353	It appeared you are trying to tell a story through the music, I also found the audio loop difficult to listen to, it made the entire clip hard to follow. In my amateur opinion, the visual half of your video exceeded the quality of your audio half. The audio is an integral part of a music video. I listen to rap music, it is not the style I dislike, it is the poor mix and repetitious background loop __________________ "What I need is an exact list of specific unknown problems we might encounter."

April 21st, 2008, 01:02 AM	#478
Mark Dawson Regular Crew Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: London (United Kingdom) Posts: 52	If I Lay here My new short features shot on location 19th April in St Johns Wood London - Features a talented London drama student acting to the music of Snow Patrol's - Chasing Cars it can be found on my website www.londonmarkfilms.co.uk under the films section. __________________ Mark Dawson - Director www.londonmarkfilms.com www.twitter.com/Londonmarkfilms

April 21st, 2008, 08:13 AM	#480
Douglas R. Bruce Regular Crew Join Date: May 2006 Location: Kumamoto City, Japan Posts: 136	In response to some of the feedback I have received in the past 2 days I have tweaked and adjusted certain parts of the video and have now uploaded a newer version. Same url as mentioned in the first post in this thread. Regards, Douglas __________________ I was produced in Scotland, edited in Sweden, and am now showing in Japan. http://www.gaijin-eyes.com

April 19th, 2008, 07:17 PM	#466
Doug Okamoto Regular Crew Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Bellevue, Washington Posts: 145	Douglas! Great first name by the way! :) Lorinda is always so nice she can't criticize, me on the other hand... Not a criticism but a little critic. The video was very informative and entertaining! It actually kept my interest. The ending VFX were good could have been better if this were a big budget film production! The end left me a little hanging, maybe a "thank you for watching" or ending graphic would be a good way to finish your story. But other than that I liked it very much! Great job.

April 20th, 2008, 04:45 AM	#470
Rikki Bruce Regular Crew Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Glasgow. Scotland Posts: 79	That was fantastic work. Would you mind saying which camera and equip you used in production?

April 20th, 2008, 02:03 PM	#471
Oleg Kalyan Major Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: MOSCOW Posts: 860	Rikki, thank you! I've shot the commercial with Canon H1 with my CF profile, PS technik mini35 adapter, the lenses were Nikkor 35mm 1.4 50mm 1.2 Zeiss 100mm F2 macro and Elite 75mm 1.9 Cheers!

April 20th, 2008, 04:22 PM	#472
Dennis Murphy Major Player Join Date: May 2006 Location: Whangarei, New Zealand Posts: 396	I thought the video was ok, but the music was annoying. That trumpet sound was like a whining insect, and the dynamics of the loop are noticeably different... the volume of the first beat is significantly louder in a distracting way. Disclaimer: just my opinion of course.

April 20th, 2008, 04:31 PM	#473
Dennis Murphy Major Player Join Date: May 2006 Location: Whangarei, New Zealand Posts: 396	That was cool. Nice performances and you caught them nicely in a way that reflects a night out getting hammered watching some 'unknowns' perform in a dark corner of a dodgy bar. My kind of night out.

April 20th, 2008, 05:29 PM	#475
Matthew Overstreet Regular Crew Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Whitman, Massachusetts Posts: 168	New reel is now online. http://vimeo.com/883277

April 20th, 2008, 08:20 PM	#477
Mike Eshaq Tourist Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Michigan Posts: 4	Hmmm...I rendered the audio at the best quality I can. Youtube really gets to me that way, there is no way to make it perfect. Thanks

April 21st, 2008, 01:15 AM	#479
Tom Hardwick Inner Circle Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Billericay, England UK Posts: 4,711	Nice one Mark, and it's all in the lighting, the lighting, the lighting. So many people forget that. It's just a shame the songwriter doesn't know that the past tense of lie is lay. tom.