UWOL #18 - Source of life - by Trond Saetre

Trond Saetre · November 26th, 2010, 05:12 AM

Hi Mike,
Yes, I agree. It is easy to forget that the nature itself can be a good subject for video, even without animals.

Mat Thompson · November 27th, 2010, 08:23 AM

Hi Trond

have you got the the award for most completed uwol films yet !? - Some nice shots in your film and you had a good premise. Mr Railsback tackled a very similar idea way back in a uwol 4 with his journey to the sea.

After the strong introduction however it then seemed to fizzle away and didn't really go anywhere. Even another line of VO at the end to draw some sort of conclusion might have made it seem more complete although I think it needed something more visual as well to illustrate your little journey.

You have definately thought a bit more about story in this piece, now tightening it it up so more would really do the trick.

Thanks for sharing
Mat

Trond Saetre · November 27th, 2010, 12:25 PM

Mat,
Thank you for your always so straight forward feedback. I really appreciate!
I was debating myself if I should include more VO near the end. Concluded that I wanted to let the visuals talk for itself. I guess I should have listened to the other half of the brain.
I agree that the last part is weaker than the intro, which I am happy with.

Still waiting for the award to show up. :)

November 26th, 2010, 05:12 AM	#16
Trond Saetre Inner Circle Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bergen, Norway Posts: 3,375	Hi Mike, Yes, I agree. It is easy to forget that the nature itself can be a good subject for video, even without animals.

November 27th, 2010, 08:23 AM	#17
Mat Thompson Trustee Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Kent UK Posts: 1,397	Hi Trond have you got the the award for most completed uwol films yet !? - Some nice shots in your film and you had a good premise. Mr Railsback tackled a very similar idea way back in a uwol 4 with his journey to the sea. After the strong introduction however it then seemed to fizzle away and didn't really go anywhere. Even another line of VO at the end to draw some sort of conclusion might have made it seem more complete although I think it needed something more visual as well to illustrate your little journey. You have definately thought a bit more about story in this piece, now tightening it it up so more would really do the trick. Thanks for sharing Mat

November 27th, 2010, 12:25 PM	#18
Trond Saetre Inner Circle Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bergen, Norway Posts: 3,375	Mat, Thank you for your always so straight forward feedback. I really appreciate! I was debating myself if I should include more VO near the end. Concluded that I wanted to let the visuals talk for itself. I guess I should have listened to the other half of the brain. I agree that the last part is weaker than the intro, which I am happy with. Still waiting for the award to show up. :)