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Wedding Clip Trailer at BALI, please give comment · May 3rd, 2009, 08:07 PM

Hi all, we are a newcomer in this forum, please give comment to our wedding clip video. It takes at BALI.
http://vimeo.com/4313037
Thanks before. Your comments are our pleasure.

Johan Wahyudi Susanto
-record video production-

Susanto Widjaja · May 3rd, 2009, 08:47 PM

Hi fellow indonesian :)

I think you need some closer shots like CU or MS on the clip.

I think that the first line of words are a bit hard to be seen.

I think the clip is too concentrating on the "bali" then the couple itself.

Overall, there are nice scenery in there and nice moments with the couple.

Good work!!!

Santo

Johan Wahyudi Susanto · May 3rd, 2009, 10:21 PM

Hello Santo, thanks 4 u're comments.

John De Rienzo · May 4th, 2009, 09:01 AM

Hi Johan,

I would not have known this was a wedding trailer! unless you said.

It reminded me of one of those ads for sandals from the 1990's, or a advert for a holiday.

Some reasoanble footage throughout. A little unsteady in places, but with this location I think you missed some greater opportunities to be more creative with the couple.

The highlight for me was the waterfall.

Cheers.

Johan Wahyudi Susanto · May 4th, 2009, 07:11 PM

Hello John,

First, we'd like to thanks for watching our video, And yeah, you are right about "wrong" post title, thanks for your correction :)

If you see, the point of this video is on the last tag "record video production ready to you everywhere", it mean about our video ads trailer. So we do a "missed some greater opportunities with the couple".

We'll post another video in this forum and waiting for your advise.
Thanks

regard
Johan WS.
-record video production-

Oren Arieli · May 4th, 2009, 11:32 PM

You might want to consider fixing your grammar on the last line. It is a bit confusing. One option would be "Record Video...ready where you are" or "Record Video Production; Ready for you anywhere" or "Record Video Productions...there when you need us"

I'm a huge fan of Bali, having been there for my honeymoon. There are so many beautiful temples and locations, yet stuck to the beach for most of this video. I can't tell if this is a promo for your services, for Bali, for a travel company or Viagra. You might consider more titles to be clear with your message.

Johan Wahyudi Susanto · May 5th, 2009, 01:36 AM

Hi Oren Arieli,

Thanks for your good advices. I'll consider it.

Please wait for my another video clip and please don't be hesitate to give a suggest for us

Best regards,

Johan WS
-record video production-

May 3rd, 2009, 08:47 PM	#2
Susanto Widjaja Major Player Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 622	Hi Hi fellow indonesian :) I think you need some closer shots like CU or MS on the clip. I think that the first line of words are a bit hard to be seen. I think the clip is too concentrating on the "bali" then the couple itself. Overall, there are nice scenery in there and nice moments with the couple. Good work!!! Santo __________________ If a picture is worth a thousand words, what about motion picture? website: www.papercranes.com.au \| blog: www.weddingvideosydney.net

May 3rd, 2009, 10:21 PM	#3
Johan Wahyudi Susanto New Boot Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Surabaya, Indonesia Posts: 17	Thanks Hello Santo, thanks 4 u're comments.

May 4th, 2009, 09:01 AM	#4
John De Rienzo Major Player Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: London Posts: 313	Hi Johan, I would not have known this was a wedding trailer! unless you said. It reminded me of one of those ads for sandals from the 1990's, or a advert for a holiday. Some reasoanble footage throughout. A little unsteady in places, but with this location I think you missed some greater opportunities to be more creative with the couple. The highlight for me was the waterfall. Cheers. __________________ De Rienzo Films www.derienzo-films.co.uk

May 4th, 2009, 07:11 PM	#5
Johan Wahyudi Susanto New Boot Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Surabaya, Indonesia Posts: 17	Hello John, First, we'd like to thanks for watching our video, And yeah, you are right about "wrong" post title, thanks for your correction :) If you see, the point of this video is on the last tag "record video production ready to you everywhere", it mean about our video ads trailer. So we do a "missed some greater opportunities with the couple". We'll post another video in this forum and waiting for your advise. Thanks regard Johan WS. -record video production-

May 4th, 2009, 11:32 PM	#6
Oren Arieli Major Player Join Date: May 2007 Location: San Jose, California Posts: 918	You might want to consider fixing your grammar on the last line. It is a bit confusing. One option would be "Record Video...ready where you are" or "Record Video Production; Ready for you anywhere" or "Record Video Productions...there when you need us" I'm a huge fan of Bali, having been there for my honeymoon. There are so many beautiful temples and locations, yet stuck to the beach for most of this video. I can't tell if this is a promo for your services, for Bali, for a travel company or Viagra. You might consider more titles to be clear with your message.

May 5th, 2009, 01:36 AM	#7
Johan Wahyudi Susanto New Boot Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Surabaya, Indonesia Posts: 17	Hi Oren Arieli, Thanks for your good advices. I'll consider it. Please wait for my another video clip and please don't be hesitate to give a suggest for us Best regards, Johan WS -record video production-