View Full Version : Short film for your critique


David Evans
June 6th, 2019, 07:19 AM
Hey guys,

Just finished a new short film that I would like to show you. Very important theme in this story and we tried to be as sober as possible. It's a bit stylized and oppressive but I think in the end it leaves you with a positive feeling that it's both hopeful and complex. Hope you enjoy it.

Private video on Vimeo

Pass: insidefilmscreener

Let me know what you think.

Donald McPherson
June 6th, 2019, 10:20 AM
I think you need to check your password.

David Evans
June 6th, 2019, 12:14 PM
Right you are Donald. Just corrected in the original post.

David Evans
June 8th, 2019, 06:29 AM
Is the password working now?

Bob Safay
June 9th, 2019, 10:27 AM
It's not working

David Evans
June 9th, 2019, 12:08 PM
That's weird... Just double checked. Password is insidefilmscreener. Anyone else having problems viewing the video?

Cary Knoop
June 9th, 2019, 12:48 PM
Can't see it, just provide a direct link to Vimeo.

David Evans
June 9th, 2019, 01:04 PM
Here it is

vimeo.com/340405576

David Evans
June 13th, 2019, 07:51 AM
Hey guys, just wondering if anyone was able to load the video.

Thanks

Dave Baker
June 13th, 2019, 08:59 AM
The password works for me but the link doesn't.

David Evans
June 29th, 2019, 02:30 AM
Trailer is out :

https://youtu.be/fr6U90Cerqs

Steven Digges
July 18th, 2019, 11:16 AM
Hey David,

I was able to see the whole thing. I like the shooting, well done for this type of flic. I would be critical of the audio mix though. It is over the top. There are times when the male actor is clearly not breathing heavy. But it seems to me you added loud heavy breathing in post for the effect. To me, it is so overpowering and out of place it sounds like a third person is in the room watching them.

Well done short. I hope it works for you.

Kind Regards,

Steve

David Evans
July 24th, 2019, 12:26 AM
Hey Steven, thanks for watching. Yeah, I am still not happy with some bits of the heavy breathing. If you have the time, could you point out for the parts that distracted you the most?

Thanks!