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Steven Houser March 16th, 2008 10:02 PM

Please Judge my work Download clip Link:
Shot HD100 720p 30p
Edited AE CS3 Comp settings 1080p/23.98 used resizer 2.0 for uprez.

Quality small for upload.....


Marc Jayson March 17th, 2008 04:00 PM

Hey Steven,

What kind of light did you use on the shot with the girl with the glasses (16sec)?

Steven Houser March 17th, 2008 04:13 PM

DP-1497 Kit

So what would you change in the commercial??

Taylor Brush March 21st, 2008 07:25 AM

Personally, I'd spend more time concentrating on the comedy than the cuisine, since people are going to come here for comedy and not the food. You put more time on the girl talking about the dip and salmon than anything else. She repeats herself about how good the food is - all I remember at the end is that the food is good. With precious seconds, I'd spend as much time on the comedy as possible. It's OK to mention the food, just trim it down.

The one punchline you do have is partially cut off or garbled, I listened to it several times and I didn't get it - the first words I can make out are "girls at the bank..." Your one joke should at least be funny. I'd change the joke to something that doesn't need a set-up, like this one seems to need.

Then for the audience reaction shot, I'd put another joke VO over that. It's too long of a laugh when we don't even realize what is funny. Also I'd speed the effects up a little bit - get them on screen faster.

2for1 should be bigger at the end, since you are highlighting it with the VO, although I don't think you need the VO for the special - I'd put another zinger one-liner VO over the logo at the end.

Hope this helps. I miss the critiques that we used to do in film school. The class would totally break it down and then you'd have a bunch of suggestions to play around with.

Steven Houser March 21st, 2008 07:31 AM

Thx Taylor!
Everything you mentioned was on point..
We have trashed that first draft and started from scratch at this point...
I will repost new commercial when finished...

David Michnowicz March 22nd, 2008 06:35 AM

Hey Steve,

I really like the graphics work, My only suggestion would be to give a little more "oomph" to the backround. Perhaps still use the light treatment in the upper left, but put some wide shots of the club as your backround in black and white and a bit blurred instead of just the black, still getting the same effect but using a bit more footage so people viewing can get a sense of what the club is like.....Unless of course the place is a dump....just kidding, overall I liked it.

Steven Houser March 22nd, 2008 09:45 AM

Thx David
I might do that.....

Kenneth Johnson March 22nd, 2008 09:57 AM

Thought the editing was GREAT. Loved the overlay. If you do not mind sharing how did you do the graphics? The boxes around the subject was perfect. If you do not mind I would love to know how your secret. Thought it was a great clip, well done.


Steven Houser March 22nd, 2008 12:19 PM

Thanks Ken!
There is a link above to the company that makes AE templates at a great price....Thats how the graphics were done...
Mention my name and get a discount....

Jim Andrada March 22nd, 2008 03:42 PM


Overall I liked the flow. I'd go along with a couple of the other comments re the realtive amount of time spent on various shots - could be balanced a bit better, but the pace is good - maybe a bit jerky for my old fashioned tastes, but all in all, pretty good - better than a lot of what one sees on TV these days. Graphocs worked well and didn't distract. Nice job!

I think I'd cut the last girl off right after she says that the food is really good

My main suggestion for improvement would be the sound - sort of thin/harsh and nasal. No resonance or fullness to the voices. Sort of like a not so great phone line. If you compare the comments with the VO at the end, the contrast is pretty great. Makes the customer comments sort of hard to understand. Understand that the environment isn't the best for great audio, but I think it could be less harsh. Music also sounded a bit tinny.

Steven Houser March 22nd, 2008 04:17 PM

Thx! for suggestions
I agree with the audio,Im workn on the revised commercial will keep in mind...

Joseph A. Benoit March 22nd, 2008 07:42 PM

will those graphics work with VEGAS 6.0

Steven Houser March 23rd, 2008 12:44 AM

Hey Joseph!
The are made for AE..
I would start learning Adobe,whole other world of possiblities!
I was Vegas till 3 months ago started Adobe products...
Download a demo...
You can work with 3D enviroments and Virtial Camera..and so many tools to play with... Big movies are made with Adobe.........
Thx for looking!

Brian Luce March 23rd, 2008 02:23 AM

I'd make the point somewhere in the spot about how much fun it is to go to the place. I wouldn't bother showing a joke, the one you have is either incomplete or simply not funny. Made me think that place has lousy comics. Show a comedian yes, but have some other v/o.

Steven Houser March 23rd, 2008 08:01 AM

You are correct! We have decided to use clips of comedians no audio from them!
Thx...Ill have the new spot done Wed.

Joseph A. Benoit March 23rd, 2008 10:50 AM

Hi Steve
Thank you for the info
I used Adobe for years 6.0 with a pinnacle card in fact i still have it
problem is can't do HD with it.

i must admit great 3d effects
if i shoot SD with my 110 i still use the adobe 6.0

the adobe that your talking about is it 2.0?

Steven Houser March 23rd, 2008 02:31 PM

I never new you couldnt do HD with previous versions of Adobe..Wow!
Im using the CS3 Suite all HD 1080p Im lovn it....

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