I agree that it would be contrived to have her kill the rapists, but then again it's cliched to have her commit suicide.

There's a number of ways you could go. One of which is maybe she got pregnant and had to go to the abortion clinic.

Back in highschool when I was getting off the bus, an aquaintance of mine ran up and hospitalized a kid, it wasn't a fair fight, just a massacre right out there on the turf, my first emotion was of pity for the kid who didn't stand a chance, my second one was of contempt for his attacker after doing such a heineous act.

But then my buddy told me the kid had hit the guys girfriend who had been pregnant at the time and caused her to have a miscarriage. and then my original thoughts of pity and contempt flew right out the window.

That's why I think it would be cool to open on a beating scene much like the one in Choice, because you would toy with the audiences emotions by having them feel pity for the kid being attacked, then completely do a 180 degree turn after they learn that he played a part in a rape.

Just a random idea hamster. Can't wait for your next film.

BTW, if you wouldn't mind directing someone else's written work I'd be happy to write something for you, if you enjoy what I scribble down that is. I'm always curious what my written word would look like in the hands of another director.

Trevor T.

Just my two cents
 

Well..

This might roll some heads, but...

I wish in the scene where she was crying as she watched the tape (err, I mean .rm file online of course) you would have kicked it to the next level. She should have been self-loving and it would have added the whole dynamic of shame at being taken advantage of, shame at being excited by the whole thing. It would give an extra edge to her suicide - the cross motivation of self hate and shame - and it would have knocked your audience on their collective seats.

I also wish the bad people had been rougher. I kept waiting for one of the bad people to haul off and hit her a good one. Its bad enough to have two animal-like guys to hurt the woman but they're also treating her as their lover? That struck me as odd, but then what do I know.

That's just me. If you are going to go for the jugular, I say go for it and don't look back...

Now, these two comments aside, I thought it was a great short. You are obviously very talented with provocative and interesting ideas that you can express with excellent visuals. Thank you for making the short, I enjoyed watching it - exactly as you made it.

Probably a little late commenting on this, but I just saw your new tape short film, and despite all the criticisms on cliched suicides, you handled this overdone material extremely well. the camera angles and the choice of what to include and what to exclude took a true director's eye. the framing of the spiking the glass and the girl together, and the final shot of the sink drain were really great

kept my attention all the way

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