Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Good point Paul. My comments are just a general impression of him talking about his film as a series of events and my feelings how his previous movies have turned out.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

If youre gonna do that you should just encourage him to send the whole screenplay or however much he’s got.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Pete - yes, that's the impression I got. Brian's pretty good on script stuff, far better than me - but all we have is that 'gut reaction' which could be wrong if Ryan doesn't explain accurately.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Oh yeah, but I felt I had that kind of drama, since the prosecutor thinks the case is too problematic to go ahead, with, and the cop is pushing him to take the risk, even though he may likely lose, etc... Later he loses and it looks bad for the cop then.

So I thought I still had that kind of drama.

As for posting the script, well I was going to have a script consultant rewrite the dialogue first, to make it better. I could post some, it's just I don't know how to get it on here, without the format becoming messed up.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

The format doesn't matter Ryan - The script consultant sounds a bit worrying?

What are you producing it in? Word? Simplest would probably to drop box it and post a link to it for those interested? That keeps it more private.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Just export it to pdf...that should “solidify” the formatting no matter how it originated

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Oh okay, thanks, I can see about that. I wrote it in MMS.

Why are the script consultants worrying? I was told my dialogue is not good, so shouldn't I get someone else with better experience to rewrite it therefore?

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Script consultants don't rewrite dialogue, you do. If you want the dialogue rewritten you employ another writer.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Oh okay, I can do that then. There is a particular person I have in mind who I thought of as a script consultant who offered to rewrite it, if I pay him to of course, but I can go to another writer, if not.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

If you're paying them as a writer, it could cost your entire budget.

Because someone is a script consultant, it doesn't automatically mean that they're good writers.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

It might cut into his prop budget. ie no handcuffs :-(

To tell you the truth I'm not too keen on seeing the entire script. I can only handle so many problems. Ryan why don't you just post a page or two of this particular scene.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Oh okay. Well here is a link to the scene if that helps. If I am not allowed to post links, I can take it down:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Lhi...ew?usp=sharing

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

It's a rather ponderous scene and if this is the first time the audience comes across the prosecutor they don't know who he is, since it's never mentioned and so it's this unknown person talking on the phone. The audience can't see the name on the script.

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

Oh okay, thanks. I can give the prosecutor a name. It's just he is never mentioned by name and is always referred to as the CP (crown prosecutor), but I can give him a name.

How is it ponderous exactly? You said it came off as clumbsy before, but why exactly, or what are the specifics now?

Re: How do you get this type of blue sunlight cinematography?
 

The dialogue is ponderous, it's not sharp, there are unnecessary words, it's all on the nose, there's no sub text. If the prosecutor is important character in this he's just a voice, that fine if it's the mysterious criminal mastermind or a hoaxer sending phone messages, but not in this case.

Read some film scripts and look at the dialogue.