Visually critique this image please
 

camera panasonic HDX 900, with standard issued lens.



2 300 watt lights ( this is all we had)
smoke machine.

Camera operated, D.i.T and D.o.P this music video, here are some before and after shots. i colour corrected in avid, i am no editor, just wanted to see what the final image could look like.

Dteailed feedback would be good

Thanks.

please ignore as the files would not attach...