DVC#3 "The Jealous Camera" Feedback at DVinfo.net

Richard Zlamany · September 19th, 2005, 11:52 PM

Hi, all. This is my 1st entry in the challenge. I was wondering what you all thought and what advice can be given. To me it was a kind of South Park/Sponge Bob short with a punch line without the cartoons. Was it funny?

Lorinda Norton · September 20th, 2005, 12:06 AM

Richard,

Was it funny??? I laughed out loud!!!! The last line just cracked me up. And the voice of the Olympus camera was great.

Congratulations on your first DVC movie! Looking forward to your next one. :)

Richard Zlamany · September 20th, 2005, 12:10 AM

Thank you for the kind words. I'm happy you laughed. At times I thought it might be stupid. This is great forum and a cool challenge.

Hugo Pinto · September 20th, 2005, 12:20 AM

Richard,

The cameras (and their accented voices) were very well done, and very funny to watch. Was you lead actress shy? She never showed her face... :) Or were you aiming for a human-in-a-cartoon look where humans never completely show up?

Very good one, well done.

Hugo

Richard Zlamany · September 20th, 2005, 12:26 AM

Thank you. Yes, I was going for "the for a human-in-a-cartoon look where humans never completely show up" This is a great time.

Fredrik-Larsson · September 20th, 2005, 01:11 AM

This was VERY VERY VERY fun! I loved how the cameras spoke. And the lines where totally right. I might not know if it was a obvious choice that the black camera should be somewhat meaner and the silver should be innocent. It somehow manifested the jealous camera even more.

I also noted that you changed the roses and props on the table. Well done :)

Bradley L Marlow · September 20th, 2005, 01:40 AM

Hi Richard- This was indeed a very funny film!

I thought you did an excellent job adding both life and personality to those two camera critters.

Nice accent Richard...a little Connery action there? "He's out a tha picture." lol And the Canon voice was something like Mr Bill and one of those Abbott and Costello cartoon cats from WB a long time ago.

Sean Buck · September 20th, 2005, 12:49 PM

Nice job. I guy that I work with had a similiar idea. It was interesting to see how you executed your idea. Good job.

Richard Zlamany · September 20th, 2005, 06:59 PM

Thank you. Here is another link if the original link doesn't work.

http://www.ourmedia.org/node/57682

Robert Mann Z. · September 20th, 2005, 09:39 PM

excellent job..very funny...i loved it

Jonathan Jones · September 21st, 2005, 04:14 PM

Hello Richard,
I was very entertained by your short - In the back of my mind I have actually imagined just such a situation (in fantasy land) when I bought my first digital camera and placed it on a shelf next to a few of my wife's relatively un-used older film cameras - you captured it quite well and made it funny with catchy dialoge and I enjoyed the voices and accent.

I also liked the attention to the details involving the side table and the changing items on it.

Very cute and funny.
-Jon

Richard Zlamany · September 21st, 2005, 11:01 PM

Thank you. I am so glad you all enjoyed it.

Jeff Sayre · September 22nd, 2005, 01:51 PM

For your first short, I liked the story you told. It was funny. I almost believed that the cameras were actually talking to one another. I was half expecting that you were going to replace the digital still camera with a new digital video camera.

Everyone has said this before but I too liked the accent of the cameras. Those pesky Canon cameras sure can cause lots of trouble sometimes!

Also, for your first short, you paid close attention to continuity by making sure the table dressing changed from one year to the next. Continuity is something I sometimes struggle with in my movie shorts.

September 19th, 2005, 11:52 PM	#1
Richard Zlamany Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hamden CT Posts: 470	DVC#3 "The Jealous Camera" Feedback Hi, all. This is my 1st entry in the challenge. I was wondering what you all thought and what advice can be given. To me it was a kind of South Park/Sponge Bob short with a punch line without the cartoons. Was it funny?

September 20th, 2005, 12:06 AM	#2
Lorinda Norton Wrangler Join Date: Nov 2001 Location: Southwest Idaho, USA Posts: 3,066	There you are!!! Richard, Was it funny??? I laughed out loud!!!! The last line just cracked me up. And the voice of the Olympus camera was great. Congratulations on your first DVC movie! Looking forward to your next one. :) __________________ Lorinda

September 21st, 2005, 04:14 PM	#11
Jonathan Jones Trustee Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Healdsburg, California Posts: 1,138	Quite entertaining Hello Richard, I was very entertained by your short - In the back of my mind I have actually imagined just such a situation (in fantasy land) when I bought my first digital camera and placed it on a shelf next to a few of my wife's relatively un-used older film cameras - you captured it quite well and made it funny with catchy dialoge and I enjoyed the voices and accent. I also liked the attention to the details involving the side table and the changing items on it. Very cute and funny. -Jon __________________ "Are we to go on record, sir, with our assertion that the 'pink hearts, yellow moons, orange stars, and green clovers' are, in point of fact', magically delicious?" - Walter Hollarhan before the House Subcommittee on Integrity in Advertising - May, 1974

September 22nd, 2005, 01:51 PM	#13
Jeff Sayre Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: South Bend, IN Posts: 301	For your first short, I liked the story you told. It was funny. I almost believed that the cameras were actually talking to one another. I was half expecting that you were going to replace the digital still camera with a new digital video camera. Everyone has said this before but I too liked the accent of the cameras. Those pesky Canon cameras sure can cause lots of trouble sometimes! Also, for your first short, you paid close attention to continuity by making sure the table dressing changed from one year to the next. Continuity is something I sometimes struggle with in my movie shorts. __________________ www.SayreMedia.com

September 20th, 2005, 12:10 AM	#3
Richard Zlamany Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hamden CT Posts: 470	Thank you for the kind words. I'm happy you laughed. At times I thought it might be stupid. This is great forum and a cool challenge.

September 20th, 2005, 12:20 AM	#4
Hugo Pinto Regular Crew Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Lisbon, Portugal Posts: 92	Richard, The cameras (and their accented voices) were very well done, and very funny to watch. Was you lead actress shy? She never showed her face... :) Or were you aiming for a human-in-a-cartoon look where humans never completely show up? Very good one, well done. Hugo

September 20th, 2005, 12:26 AM	#5
Richard Zlamany Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hamden CT Posts: 470	Thank you. Yes, I was going for "the for a human-in-a-cartoon look where humans never completely show up" This is a great time.

September 20th, 2005, 01:11 AM	#6
Fredrik-Larsson Major Player Join Date: May 2005 Location: Malmö, Sweden Posts: 395	This was VERY VERY VERY fun! I loved how the cameras spoke. And the lines where totally right. I might not know if it was a obvious choice that the black camera should be somewhat meaner and the silver should be innocent. It somehow manifested the jealous camera even more. I also noted that you changed the roses and props on the table. Well done :)

September 20th, 2005, 01:40 AM	#7
Bradley L Marlow Major Player Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Central Wyoming Posts: 484	Hi Richard- This was indeed a very funny film! I thought you did an excellent job adding both life and personality to those two camera critters. Nice accent Richard...a little Connery action there? "He's out a tha picture." lol And the Canon voice was something like Mr Bill and one of those Abbott and Costello cartoon cats from WB a long time ago.

September 20th, 2005, 12:49 PM	#8
Sean Buck Regular Crew Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 44	Nice job. I guy that I work with had a similiar idea. It was interesting to see how you executed your idea. Good job.

September 20th, 2005, 06:59 PM	#9
Richard Zlamany Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hamden CT Posts: 470	Thank you. Here is another link if the original link doesn't work. http://www.ourmedia.org/node/57682

September 20th, 2005, 09:39 PM	#10
Robert Mann Z. Skyonic New York Join Date: Nov 2001 Location: NYC Posts: 614	excellent job..very funny...i loved it

September 21st, 2005, 11:01 PM	#12
Richard Zlamany Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hamden CT Posts: 470	Thank you. I am so glad you all enjoyed it.