October 18th, 2018, 09:36 PM | #1 |
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October Nights
My latest video is part of an ongoing series celebrating various scenic features in and around our neighborhood. I did something a little different with the narration on this one. The images seemed to cry out for some poetry, so that's what I did. Hopefully it works... let me know what you think!
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November 20th, 2018, 07:45 AM | #2 |
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Re: October Nights
Just a couple quick thoughts...
- The intro seems too long. It goes on for 12 seconds which seems like an eternity - University City was difficult to read at the beginning based on font and color choice - I assume that is you with the voice-over? It sounds fine, but even hiring someone from Fiverr would make a huge difference in the production value of this - While the footage is nice, it feels like I'm looking at the same shot over and over for 2 minutes straight. I know your theme was October nights so you need night footage, but perhaps some different footage other than a time-lapse would help make it stand out more and be a bit easier to watch. |
November 28th, 2018, 12:30 PM | #3 |
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Re: October Nights
Thanks for taking the time to watch and comment!
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February 19th, 2019, 03:28 PM | #4 |
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Re: October Nights
Time-lapse takes so much work!
I understand the theme was clouds and nights...It would have been fun to see more traffic and city night shots. Light trails from both air and ground traffic can be dramatic. As mentioned, the "University City" font was difficult to read. |
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