Lovestory "Three Patrice's women" at DVinfo.net

Serge Satkar · July 14th, 2008, 04:32 PM

http://vimeo.com/1337090

My first lovestory shot on XH-A1 and HV20
It's a piece of experimental work according to couple intentions
Will appreciate any comments!

Richard Wakefield · July 14th, 2008, 05:09 PM

really very good, and commendably different to alot of other stuff out there... i loved some of the touches that kept it in sequence with the day-dreaming (music delay/echo, and turning the shots upside down)

couple of things:
- the three women sequences each went on a bit too long...there def. would have been more impact in keeping those shorter
- you spelt 'goodbye' as 'good buy' :)

brilliant quality, and some really inspiring shots and close-ups

David Schuurman · July 14th, 2008, 05:48 PM

I liked it alot! So very "outside the box" from the typical love story.

I agree that the dream sequences should be shorter to have more impact. I found myself waiting for the next part a bit. I also wish the actor had more emotion in his voice when he was talking to the girl.

Serge Satkar · July 15th, 2008, 04:26 AM

Thanks for your kind words!

Richard
I'll consider shortening the sequences on final edit for sure. This story was shown on reception first, but planned as a part of whole wedding film (about 20-25min long). Events will smoothly flow from park to wedding day.

Ups! :) funny misspelling.. my English can be odd a little, I have very seldom practice.. Will try reading more, maybe even commenting sometime :)

David
Yes, some shots even without visible mimic sound not confident enough, I know that. Both of "actors" far from actors profession in real life, so that was the best takes from many.

Travis Cossel · July 15th, 2008, 04:08 PM

What a great concept for a video! Nice job on the unique approach. Overall the video was well done.

Just some suggestions for you ...

Shorten up the segments with the three women as you have said you are going to do. Also, I think a few more shots of the groom dreaming by the tree during each of those segments would help sell the idea that he is dreaming. I didn't really like the echo on his voice, and I think a strong whisper would have worked better for selling the dream. That's just my opinion, though.

As far as your English, don't worry about it. Be proud that you can speak understand and speak another language, as many people can't.

Keep up the good work!

Serge Satkar · July 16th, 2008, 05:36 AM

Travis, thank you!
I'll consider moments about dream!

Thanks for English too :) Client's version has russian subtitles (my native language) so almost sure it spelled well.. Is it..?? (going to reread) :)

Wanted to ask one question.. I've used some shots with nonstabilized "live" camera on final scene especially. Don't it look too rough?
I like to use sometime action camera and in my opinion it can increase emotional impact in certain scenes. I was choosing between several static shots and "live" walking camera.. And decided that live camera looks natural and cause more immersion in emotional scene.
What do you think about it?

July 14th, 2008, 04:32 PM	#1
Serge Satkar Regular Crew Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Moscow Posts: 107	Lovestory "Three Patrice's women" http://vimeo.com/1337090 My first lovestory shot on XH-A1 and HV20 It's a piece of experimental work according to couple intentions Will appreciate any comments!

July 15th, 2008, 04:08 PM	#5
Travis Cossel Inner Circle Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Miami, FL Posts: 2,933	What a great concept for a video! Nice job on the unique approach. Overall the video was well done. Just some suggestions for you ... Shorten up the segments with the three women as you have said you are going to do. Also, I think a few more shots of the groom dreaming by the tree during each of those segments would help sell the idea that he is dreaming. I didn't really like the echo on his voice, and I think a strong whisper would have worked better for selling the dream. That's just my opinion, though. As far as your English, don't worry about it. Be proud that you can speak understand and speak another language, as many people can't. Keep up the good work! __________________ Black Label Films www.blacklabelweddingfilms.com

July 14th, 2008, 05:09 PM	#2
Richard Wakefield Major Player Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Surrey, UK Posts: 680	really very good, and commendably different to alot of other stuff out there... i loved some of the touches that kept it in sequence with the day-dreaming (music delay/echo, and turning the shots upside down) couple of things: - the three women sequences each went on a bit too long...there def. would have been more impact in keeping those shorter - you spelt 'goodbye' as 'good buy' :) brilliant quality, and some really inspiring shots and close-ups

July 14th, 2008, 05:48 PM	#3
David Schuurman Major Player Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Hamilton, ON Canada Posts: 369	I liked it alot! So very "outside the box" from the typical love story. I agree that the dream sequences should be shorter to have more impact. I found myself waiting for the next part a bit. I also wish the actor had more emotion in his voice when he was talking to the girl.

July 15th, 2008, 04:26 AM	#4
Serge Satkar Regular Crew Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Moscow Posts: 107	Thanks for your kind words! Richard I'll consider shortening the sequences on final edit for sure. This story was shown on reception first, but planned as a part of whole wedding film (about 20-25min long). Events will smoothly flow from park to wedding day. Ups! :) funny misspelling.. my English can be odd a little, I have very seldom practice.. Will try reading more, maybe even commenting sometime :) David Yes, some shots even without visible mimic sound not confident enough, I know that. Both of "actors" far from actors profession in real life, so that was the best takes from many.

July 16th, 2008, 05:36 AM	#6
Serge Satkar Regular Crew Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Moscow Posts: 107	Travis, thank you! I'll consider moments about dream! Thanks for English too :) Client's version has russian subtitles (my native language) so almost sure it spelled well.. Is it..?? (going to reread) :) Wanted to ask one question.. I've used some shots with nonstabilized "live" camera on final scene especially. Don't it look too rough? I like to use sometime action camera and in my opinion it can increase emotional impact in certain scenes. I was choosing between several static shots and "live" walking camera.. And decided that live camera looks natural and cause more immersion in emotional scene. What do you think about it?